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I am a girl.
Boys do not define me.
I am as strong as a thunderbird,
Golden winds flapping above the savage sea.

Waves rise from the ocean and reach high,
Stretching icy fingers that catch.
Soaring high to defy,
The deadly waves, unscathed.

I am a woman- stubborn as a goat.
Men do not rule society.
We stand as proud oaks,
Living amongst the maples in equality.

Long limbs stretch wide,
Mingling and interweaving.
Lives intertwined, never to divide,
With love strong and sincere, undying.

I am a girl.
Boys do not define me.
I am as strong as a thunderbird,
Golden winds flapping above the savage sea.
I wanted to try my hand at some poety so heres what I came up with.

I am a girl.
Boys do not define me.
I am as strong as a thunderbird,
Golden winds flapping above the savage sea.

These lines mean that girls do not need boys to define who they are. You do not need a boyfriend or a husband to feel that you are worth anything.

Waves rise from the ocean and reach high,
Stretching icy fingers that catch.
Soaring high to defy,
The deadly waves, unscathed.

You are your own person and no matter how many times people try to change you, you stay yourself. You know it is better to be yourself then to be a creation of someone else.

I am a woman- stubborn as a goat.
Men do not rule society.
We stand as proud oaks,
Living amongst the maples in equality.

Women deserve equal rights. Since I am American, these lines were reflecting the womens rights movement; how we now are equal and how woman can vote and drive cars and hold important jobs. Being proud oaks implies that women are just as strong as men and living amonst maples means that we are equal and can live amongst the men instead of being house wives.

Long limbs stretch wide,
Mingling and interweaving.
Lives intertwined, never to divide,
With love strong and sincere, undying.

Women have mixed into society and a new kind of love has created from that. The men no longer rule the relationship (for the most part) and women and men live as a partnership. This results in a stronger relationship and a deeper love.

I am a girl.
Boys do not define me.
I am as strong as a thunderbird,
Golden winds flapping above the savage sea.

This line was just to reinforce the main message that girls do not need boys to define them and that they can be their own person while also having a strong relationship.

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I would love if you could criteague this! I would love to improve my poetry and any help would be appreciated!

Any fav would be much appreciated.
Any comment will be loved!
Any watch will give you my undying love.
Any llama will be returned.

THANK YOU FOR READING!!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love how empowering this poem is. It has a strong voice that gives confirmation to that unsure truth some women hold within the back of their minds.

Some girls think the boys they are with, or their relationship status is something that gives validation.
Women are beautiful human beings who can stand alone and be just as confident as a man would. I think sometimes we forget this, or lose confidence in it.

I applaud you, and really want to express my love for this poem... your words were beautiful, as well as your concept and execution. :hug:
Overall it was a very pleasurable, and thought provoking read! Thank you for sharing!
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Akyura44 Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Student General Artist
:thumbsup:
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:thanks:
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
You have been featured here.
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nothinplz Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2012
Sorry if I'm a little ignorant but the whole boys don't define me gives me the impression that girls are saying men are worthless. Don't get me wrong, I completly agree relationships are being forced on girls nowadays, but sometimes I think girls say that means that they think boys are not needed in their lives. I don't ever recall a boy saying the same thing about girls. Just saying, other than that this was a pretty good poem with a nice message!
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think the poet did this because a lot of other people seem to think having a relationship validates you, or gives you belonging within society. Due to this, some people see having a relationship as something that gifts self worth and confidence.
Some girls are sometimes judged based on whether they have such things (often by other girls), as well. It is utterly ridiculous and unneeded, which is what I believe the writer was opposing here.
(She also points out in her third stanza that women are equal with men.)

I wasn't trying to intrude on your opinion, but just saw your comment and thought perhaps I could give my own perspective and opinion.
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nothinplz Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
I understand, but haven't you heard some sexist comments some girls make to boys like "boys are useless!" or "whats the point in boys?!". Boys are human beings too, no gender can survive without the other. Not disagreeing with you though. I understand relationships can be so forced nowadays.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I hadn't thought of that. Thank you for providing me with new perspective! That definitely makes sense, and I can now understand a bit of where you're coming from.

I do believe, however, that such comments can also come from a previous experience in which they were hurt (not necessarily relationship-wise) by a boy. Do all men then deserve their hurt? Of course not! I do not pretend to understand how they do. There are a few girls who will most likely say such things being somewhat lacking of such history, too. I wish I knew why.

I definitely agree: One cannot survive without the other.
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nothinplz Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
Yep. Don't worry, I still understand where you're coming from. Both women and men are beautiful creations of life.
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Student Writer
Amazing imagery and an even more awesome message!
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! :D
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2012  Student Writer
No problem!
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NeitoRibasGirl Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2012  Student General Artist
Awesome! :love:
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HowlingSpiritLupus Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow, I could picture every line. Very nicely done. Beautiful poem. :D
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Raven-of-Prophecy Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2012
Lovely and strong imagery and message. Great work :aww:
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TransientTopHat Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student Writer
There is a strong voice here, and your imagery is grand and passionate. With the images you've presented, though, I thought the poem's intention was to say "women are a tremendous, beautiful force of nature." If you wanted to directly comment on female and male equality, then I'd suggest creating images of female strength vs. patriarchy--not just images of female strength alone (if that makes sense). The image of the oak and maple is a good example of this--it's more of a comparison. :) Overall, though, this is passionate, and well-written.
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much!!! I appreciate your criteague!!!! :D
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The-Last-Dragon Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student General Artist
*is speechless*
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LukeSaturn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this.....nicely written....one suggestion would not to explain each stanza in the description....part of the beauty of poetry, is for the reader to be able to enterpret it and to be able to think about it :meow:
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ok. I'll keep that in mind. Thank you very much!!
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LukeSaturn Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
np
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Vixen7777 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)This is wonderful written.
My favourite part is,
I am a girl.
Boys do not define me.
I am as strong as a thunderbird,
Golden winds flapping above the savage sea.
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! I appreciate your comment!!! :DDD
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Vixen7777 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!!;)
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TheBloodyEpicPumpkin Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student Writer
This caught my attention right away.
It was beautiful and well written.

Boys do not define me.
It often seems to me that girls say this, but don't live to those words.
I hear girls all the time talking about how they don't need a boyfriend one minute, and how bad they want a boyfriend the next. I seen girls go through boys like they were nothing, claiming to love them all even if just the day before they were hanging off someone else's arm.
I wish they could see that they should only need a man because they truly love this one man, and not because this man is going to be representation of who they are.

I loved it. Thank you for posting.
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much for review! I'm glad you think this way too! I really appreciate your review!! It really means a lot!! :DDDD <33
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NemoNameless Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
My favorite stanza is the fourth -


Long limbs stretch wide,
Mingling and interweaving.
Lives intertwined, never to divide,
With love strong and sincere, undying.


This is the kind of relationship I want to have with a woman. One where we share our lives together and neither one rules the other.

I like strong independent women, but at the same time it is nice to feel needed too...
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol. I have to agree with you on that. XD I always wanted a relationship like that to (obliously with a boy though since I'm a girl XD)You pretty much said almost everything I was trying to say. XD Relationships these days are always revolving around sex but you hardly ever see any of the good, old fashioned things of what made a relationship special. People need to stop changing for others and find someone who will love them for who they are. XDD

Lol, sorry for the huge paragraph. DX Thank you very much for the review though!! :DDD <3
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ETheShinigami Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student Writer
I like it! :D
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THankies!!
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ETheShinigami Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Student Writer
That's alright! :D
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JustPlainDan Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
Very nice ^^
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xXSmokeNMirrorsXx Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THANK YOU!!! :DD
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JustPlainDan Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2012
And while it is rough for women out there today, it WILL get better :)
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